Feedback on Pitch/Initial Ideas

From pitching to the class, I have realised that a knife is no appropriate to use in my video, because it is a weapon, there fore, I will have to place more emphasis on using a baseball bat instead because it is more of an everyday item. Additionally, I must do a risk assessment for the smoke grenades as they could pose a hazard to my actor and those around him. I should also bring a responsible adult with me in case anything bad happens- possibly my mum because she is a nurse and would be able to deal with any injuries.

This was the powerpoint of my pitch:

Pitch for music video from 10blukat